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*eyes grow wide*
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!Not another one!!!!!!!!!!!
*smiles warmly*
ehh,ehhm,sorry about that! alright you seem like an intelagent person so lets try to work on what you don't HAVE.
YOU NEED A BACKGROUND AND STORY LINE!!!!! No offence but you need a lot more than just "people are going to do something", Well I sure do hope so! you need to tell exactly what is going on. What is the situation?why is the charachter in this situation? how do other characters come into this situation. Tell exactly whats going on to a "T"
allright next up, yur characters, you seem to have the characters up ok, but it could use a little work. I'll give you a basic example of a character set up, if you get this roll-play better organized and add a lot more backbone, I'll join and use this example as one of my characters in yur roll play.
EXAMPLE:
Name: Midnight
age: unknown
gender:female
race:orcale
Eye color:two crystal blue eyes, and a litaraly flamming red eye on her forehead
height: 5.6ft
clothes: Bright red dress-like tunic
Hair color and style: waist long silver hair,with shoulder length red streaks that tend to curle around her face
description:She has glossy silver fur that covers her whole body. she has knine features such as her nose,claws,fangs,and paw-like hands. She has a set feathered wings on both her back and right above her elbows. her ears are like those of a dragon's and are closer to the top of her head,and hang out from under her hair. She also has a long slinder tail that is bushy and red at the very tip of it.
weapons: Alimace,a half mace half sword-like weapon. the blade itself is about two feet long not including the part of the blade that is bent to the side,in a slinder foot long streach shaped a lot like an axe head. A black rose design can be seen on both the tip of the blade and where it starts to bend,and a simmering red design runs down the blade,looks a lot like blood.
Bio: A very witty timetravler who speaks her mind, but it is not a good idea to get on her bad side. She helps those who are a crutal part of the time-line in whatever error she has been placed in. She is none the less kindhearted to all,and fun loving,and may not seem very serious at times. Even so she is very wise,and you can't go wrong by following her advice.
next, you need to add a lot more to yur setting,explain the time and place more, are you doing a modern,or a fantasy like setting, do the people in your story have technolagy? if so how much? What kind of place is this lake like? is it crystal clear,green and murky? what? what does it have by it? what kind of creature are there? make sure to add lots of detail to the setting and the story line.
also you need a HOOK.
give other RPers a reason to join yur roll play.
Oh,and give some rules, or guide line to yur roll play, tell every one what they can and cannot do, or what kinda chracters they are allowed to have.
How hope this will be enough to go by,please tell me if you need any help.
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