Characters:

Name: Ariakan (the Mighty)
Race: Human
Age: 24
Eye Color: Red
Racial Hindrance:
-Is unaware of magic due to being forced into hiding,
As all humans were
Racial Benefits:
-Humans have a very high endurance
-Knows how to tame and capture wild dragons
Preferred Weapon: Crossbow, Longsword


Name: Hawk
Race: Dark Elf
Age: 90
Eye color: Blue
Racial Benefits:
-has sudden longings for his homeland that make fighting him even more rigorous
Racial Hindrance:
-outcast from his homeland, he is never able to return again
Preferred Weapon: Staff



Setting


It is 356 AD, After Dragons roamed the world. There are still many undiscovered secrets, hoping to be found. Until one brave warrior ventures of to find these secrets, he ends up finding out that thieves are planning to kill him. The brave warrior ends up venturing into a neatly woven trap of an evil king, by the name of Chrysal. However, he has more problems to worry about. Thieves chase across the Citadel, a dangerous floating castle known for its sudden habit of "smashing" unwary travelers. Will our warrior live or die??? It's up to find out.


Backround

How Ariakan came into this situation:

Ariakan, at the age of twelve, was kidnapped by a gang of thieves known as the Hooks. Ever since that fateful day, he hated them. The thieves starved him, beat him, etc. For when he finally gets a chance to escape, he will have his revenge. Their deaths.

Rules

You can't have any characters stronger than Hawk or Ching. You also can't have any characters weaker than Halo.

Hook

Everybody that has free time, please add on to my roll-play!! I spent three weeks thinking up of a plot!!!

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
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Name: Halo
Race: Human
Age: 72
Eye color: blue
Racial Hindrance:
-none recorded
Racial Benefits:
-none recorded
Preferred Weapon: Crossbow, Battle Axe
Occupation: Warrior

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

Ooookay, you're obviously new to this and very zealous... consider yourself lucky you didn't turn up about two years ago, before I mellowed out, because I'd probably have impeeched you by now. Ask Exanderous about that when he sorts his PC out.

For starters... you don't need 6 threads for one story. Ever. You only need one. Just post any new stuff in that one thread. It stops things getting cluttered.

Secondly, you're story needs to be easier to reply too. You left it a little disjointed, try to make it so that people can reply and interact with your character and get a feel for the thread before throwing random epic battles around.

Lastly... never, oh never, no never... claim that your story will be the best ever.(Holy crap, that rhymes!) Especially when it's your first. Even experienced RPers can never tell exactly how a story will turn out.


Go edit your role-play post...make it more accesiable. Then people might even start posting there.

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ALL HAIL SCROWL!

you said what I wanted to say but didn't for fear of not doing it well. I second what tourniquet has written.

the rp still has nothing to attract people, nothing to bite at.

<b><center>Aspaheir</center></b>
Hey there, and welcome to our humble abode! :-)

First off, I should introduce myself! I’m Serenity, but most people call me Sarina. I helped manage the RPG Forums on the old boards, so I think I can help with the confusion here.

As you can see, we are an old website that is rebuilding itself on this new message board, which is why there aren’t a lot of posts and things are confusing. I beg you to bear with us (if anyone seems a little edgy) as we are still readjusting to our new surroundings as we rebuild our old forums.

To get to the point, I see you have made quite a stir with this new story of yours, and it looks like you’ve really tried to think things through, though maybe a little too much. I’m glad, however, that you are bringing some new plotlines and characters to the table and I see a lot of good things here. So, by all means, I hope we can sort out this confusion and start! :-)

<font color=blue>The first thing I’d like you to do, is take <i>all</i> of the information from the 6 threads you’ve made in the OOC forums and make sure it is posted in this thread. I see that you’ve done that mostly already, but just make sure you have it all as we don’t want to lose any information!

Then edit your first post in the other 5 threads so that the subject is “(Title here) - CLOSED"

To edit your post, sign in with your account, then enter the thread and in the left hand corner of the first post there should an “editâ€￾ button. Press it and change the subject to the above. If you have any troubles with this let me know and I will help you sort them out.

Then, go into this thread and edit the first post so the title reads “OOC: Elements – JOIN HERE!â€￾ From then on, only post in this thread, as it makes things easier to find.</font>

This will avoid confusion and I promise you, a lot more people will join when they know what thread to do it in! I have some questions about the plotline before I join, so let me know when you’re done doing this and I’ll let you know what I’m confused about, okay?

Thanks, and hope to do some Role Play with you!

~Sarina

when I said explain how he got into the situation,that not exactly what I had in mind!

Alright! it's still a little rough around the eges but I think we can work with it a bit more now. You need to add more detail,and I know you don't want to here this but you need to take more time on it and work out all the kinks,to give it more of a flow.

Don't get me wrong it is better! but it still needs some more improvement. Any writer can tell you that starting up a story is no easy task. It takes a lot of patients and willpower.

Ok, I'll give a few more pointers so listen carefully.

go back and explain why the thieves are want to kill him,make it more clear to everyone else what you are talking about. i understand that he has escaped from the theives, but you need to go back to the background imfo and tell that straight out.

Give your characters more personalty,explain what kinda person they are,their likes,dislikes,how they see things,ect.

Explain who wants to find new wonders and what they are. Explain the motive for your chacters actions,for example, why does your character want to find these new wonders.

Don't worry,with a little more work I'm sure it'll be great!

Now, the rest of you please,don't say anything if you don't have anything nice to say.

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Ok! since you already have the roll-play on the RPing post I'll join and help you get it going, in the meanwhile I want you to develuople your story a lot better than it is now Ok?


Here are my characters as of so far

Name:Debline

Age:43

Race:human

Stat: Genaral

Gender:Male

eye color:brown

Hair color and style: Brown and shagy, about 2inches long

clothing: camoflog armor

Weapons:Long sword

Bio: A milaton like man who is the head of the reable army against the dark lord Chysal, who threatens to take over Citadel. He's tough and very trust-worthy,he takes everything seriousely, and doesn't take too kindly to those who think life is a joke. He often clashes with Midnight because of her personalaty, but puts up with her because she has quite the reputation for showing people what for.

Name:Midnight


Age:unknown

Race: Orcale

stat:Time travler

Gender:Female

eyecolor:Light Crystal Blue eyes, and a Third eye on her forehead that flames red.

Hair color and style: Sraight silver waist length hair,with two shoulder length streaks of red hair that come down on both sides of her face.

Clothes: Birght red dress-like tunic

Weapons: Alimace (half mace half sword)

Description:She's covered is with glossy silver fur,she has claws,paws,and fangs,and even a K-9 nose! She also has a long thin tail that is extremly bushy and red at the very tip. She has long dragon ears that stick out of her hair and two sets of feathered wings,one set right above the elbows,and the other set located right next to her shoulders on her back.

Bio: A time travler sent by the wise ones to help be rid citadel from the evil that threatens to corupt the balance in time flow itself. She is a very down to earth type of person, who still finds pleanty of time to joke around. Although she is not one you'd want to get on her bad side. For she is as fast and as strong as an elf and is as witty as a demon. She wishes only to complet her mission but often gets attached to those she helps in her many travles.


It would be wise to go back and do a bit more with your character profiles too! I'll give you a bit ti chew on but your going to have to work on it from there Ok?

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Name: Chrysal
Age: Unknown
Eye color: Black
Race: Mage
Racial Benefits:
-having just finished the Test, a special quiz designed to test wizards to the extents of their power, he has access to a breadth of information unimaginable at an earlier age.
Racial Hindrance:
-none
Preferred Weapon: Staff
Occupation: Warrior, Mage

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

In case you haven't noticed, only a few people have been posting on my threda "The Elements."

List of Participants

Pandora
Galia Lightfoot
Exxanderous (if you want to)

Please PM me if you want to add on my thread. Thanks again, and may your swords stay sharp!!

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

Name: Thryeal-phas (the Great)
Age: 400
Race: Elf
Eye Color: Blue
Racial Hindrance:
-his homeland having fallen on a depression, he has been forced to serve in the dragonarmies until he has enough money to go back in the real world.
Racial Benefits:
-none
Preferred Weapon: dragonlance
Occupation: Spy, Warrior, Magic User

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

here be my characters profiles.

Malchios

age:1333

eye color:green

scale color: gold

racial benefits:can fly, breath fire, and can shrink or increase in size

Bio: is huge when fighting, but small for travelling. 50 feet and 15 feet, respectivally. has a small crystal set in chest which is very very powerful, but at a huge cost


History: was the Guardian of the Enclave and the mana pool, and from both places has absorbed a ton of knowledge and power. Is also Dragyness's mate


Name: Dragyness

age: 1333

eye color: electric blue

scale color: indefinate, it changes with mood

racial benefits: can fly, freeze anything, and can talk in telepathy.

Bio: very sleek and has several gems in each palm, which can hold souls or release them

History: was abandoned at a young age and traveled with several other creatures such as griffins, but was taken in by several elves. in exchange for defending their town, they gave her food. Is the mate of Malchios.

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Name: Scryser
Age: 3000
Eye Color: Red
Race: Unknown
Racial Benefits:
-none
Racial Hindrance:
-none
Preferred weapon: staff, long sword
Occupation: Storyteller, Warrior, Magic User

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

I do love making twists in the plot, especially grim ones!

General Attributes

Name: Nightshade (A.K.A. The Forestmaster)
Age: 24
Race: Human
Class: Mage
Element: Dark/Earth
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Magic Ability: Proficient

Physical Attributes

Height: 5'5"
Weight: 115lbs
Build: Slender
Hair Color/Length/Style: bangs cover eyes, short hair in the back
Eye color: Gold: Sees objects constantly dying, never to be reborn again
Complexion: Pale
Other: Golden Skin

Armor

Head: none
Chest: Black dragon skin
Arms: Golden armbands
Hands: Tight black gloves
Waist: Sash
Legs: none
Feet: Thin leather shoes
Other: Wears a long black robe, has a silver dagger on wrist only to be used as a last resort

Weaponry

MAIN:
Name: Amethyst Dagger
Type: 10" dagger
Design: Elvish make, inlaid with red rubies
Magical Attributes: Activates immediately when user's breathing becomes rapid or sluggish

Name: Staff of the Gods
Type: 66" staff
Design: Minature statues of four main gods on either sides, dragon orb on the top with spike
Magical Attributes: Allows user to summon the power of Wind, Water, Fire, and Thunder

ALSO:

Magic Spells (A Few Examples, for magic users only)

ATTACK:

Spell Name: Energoim Singulation
Element: Dark
Power Level: Amount sacrificied
Physical Description: Energy from the user's mind is combined with willpower and confidence to succeed, forms an orb of dark light that shatters in mid air
Limitation: A nighttime attack

Spell Name: Geyser Escalation
Element: Water
Power Level: Amount sacrificed
Physical Description: Opens up multiple holes in the ground which shoot out geysers
Limitation: Cannot be used in areas without a water source within 10'

Spell Name: Final Destiny
Element: Dark
Power Level: Amount sacrificed
Physical Description: The user's soul shatters, forming an orb of dark light that destroys anything within 2000'
Limitation: (no limitation)

DEFENSE:

Spell Name: Psycho Blast
Element: Dark/Wind
Power Level: Proficient
Physical Description: User is able to gain access to the opponent's mind
Limitation: Use wears off in five minutes

Spell Name: Technological Inhibition
Element: Earth
Power Level: Proficient
Physical Description: Any machines in the area will suddenly break down
Limitation: Cannot be used in a forest

Spell Name: Shield Barrier
Element: Dark
Power Level: Proficient
Physical Description: Forms a shield around the user
Limitation: Confident people(s) are able to break through easily

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Two roads diverged in a yellow road,
And I, I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference... -Robert Frost

AHHHH!!! I'm so confuzzled about this battle arena thing.

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If quitters never win, and winners never quit, what idiot came up with "Quit while you're ahead?!"
If you would like a new avatar or sig pic, pm me and ask. ^^

Name: Drian, The formidable
Age: 212
Race: Dragon
Class: Creature
Element: Fire
Alignment: Chaotic
Magic ability: N/A
Special Character abilities: Shape shift from Dragon to human for Disguise

PHYSICAL ATTRIBUTES

Height: 8 ft to shoulders, 10 ft to head
Length: 16 ft from tail to snout
Weight: 662kg
Build: Medium
Eye color: Hazel until battle then red
Complexion: Red hide
Other: spiked wings, short neck, spikes down back, white strips down wings and back, Resistance to Fire and Acid but weak to Water
Armor: My armor is my scales together with heat nothing can harm me except the power of water!
Weaponry: I wish not to use weaponry my body serves as my weapon but as an exception Fire breath and Tail!

ATTACK

Spell name: Fire Breath
Element: Fire
Power level: Mediocre
Physical description: Breath flames in every direction in a 25 meter Radius
Limitation: Limited power and time!

Spell name: Hinotama
Element: fire
Power level: Proficient
Physical description: Fires fire balls from mouth at opposition
Limitation: Easily blocked or dodged

Spell name: Earth shake
Element: Earth
Power lever: Mediocre
Physical description: Stamps rapidly to shake the earth around self
Limitation: No effect on wind or flying Opposition

DEFENSE

Spell name: fire wall
Element: Fire
Power level: Minimal
Physical description: Breaths wall of fire to defend self in sticky situation!
Limitation: Easily broken by wind or water

Spell name: Supersonic
Element: wind
Power level: Mediocre
Physical Description: Run away at supersonic speed
Limitation: Can be caught

HISTORY

Drian was born in the mountains of hell, were he was raised by his Father to be a fighter. He took on this role with grate Dignity and fought to the death. When he was only 16 he was challenged by the strongest dragon around to a fight, it was fought well but in the end he won. He has had allot of loses to especially his worse loss was to a phoenix when he was 30 when he was nearly killed.

Now he fights alone to restore his dignity and to avenge his father killed by the Elf queen!

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