Well, it seems that you've got yurself a bit of a proublem here! Okay kid, I'll help you out!,but next time you need to come up with a better story line! It's not there's something wrong with it, it just needs more back bone,you know a good solid back ground,and so far you don't have that.


Now it's got a potitail to be pretty good, but you need to get it more orginized and add more to it,you know give some more detail on what is going to happen. Also it would be a good Idea to put all your ideas and characters for the same roll play on the same Ooc thread so that this place doesn't get so clutered up K? Heres a few thing that should help you get yur story going.

Setting

This is when and where the story takes place. Now you have when but you don't have where. Describe where this story takes place,and be sure to use lots of detail.

Background

Give a background to the character and explain the situation,and how the chracter gets into the situation more fully.

Characters

Explain what yur characters are like, what hair color what race,adittude,their stats,ect.

rules
state what rules are in affect in your roll-play, like what kind of characters are allowed .

Hook

Challage other RPers to join in, give them a reason to join YOUR roll play!
even ask for suggestion to make them want to join.