Login | Register


All times are UTC - 5 hours [ DST ]


It is currently Mon May 20, 2024 9:00 pm




Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 8 posts ] 
Author Message
 Post subject: once
PostPosted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 5:43 pm 
Silver sorceress
User avatar

Joined: Thu Dec 08, 2005 6:07 pm
Posts: 1501
Location: on the back of a black dragon laughing as the world dies below me
i did a poem before but it wasnt really good i was wondering if this one was better:



once
i thought i heard a roar

once
i thought i saw some wings

once
i thought i heard my name
soaring through the breeze

once
i heard a little snuff
from somewhere in the trees

once
i thought i saw some eyes
staring through the leaves

are you out there watching me
as ive always felt

or am i simply coincidence
on your search for some one else

once
i thought i saw you watching
from high up in your roost

once
i watched a hatchling fly
for the first time with a boost

from the nest of its old home
as it went to find its own

and then i felt you watching
again like in old times

are you still there watching me
as all these years go by

_________________
If you were to juggle a lion, and a house cat, the end result would look something like a tattered chunk of red fabric. The cat would scratch anything within reach, and the lion would just eat you. The lesson to learn? Make sure you eat your spinach.


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 8:28 pm 
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon

Joined: Sun Nov 27, 2005 1:27 am
Posts: 1091
Location: Hicksville, U.S.A., Earth, Rotating Sol in the Milky Way Galaxy, the northern quadrant of space...
It's good...

But then again, I've never been an expert in poetry. In fact, my poetry is widely accepted as the fourth worst in the entire universe...

_________________
I stayed in New Orleans for Hurricane Katrina, and all I got was this lousy T-shirt, a new Cadillac, and a plasma screen T.V....


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:15 am 
British Redcoat

Joined: Sat Jul 09, 2005 12:38 pm
Posts: 863
Location: UK
i like it :D

_________________
The skeletons are playing a jig for you ...
... let's give 'em a merry dance

Aka Respergo


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Thu Jan 26, 2006 5:50 pm 
Silver sorceress
User avatar

Joined: Thu Dec 08, 2005 6:07 pm
Posts: 1501
Location: on the back of a black dragon laughing as the world dies below me
wow thats a relief i thought that no one would respond but im glad someone did it makes me feel better :)

_________________
If you were to juggle a lion, and a house cat, the end result would look something like a tattered chunk of red fabric. The cat would scratch anything within reach, and the lion would just eat you. The lesson to learn? Make sure you eat your spinach.


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Sat Jan 28, 2006 1:18 am 
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon

Joined: Sun Nov 27, 2005 1:27 am
Posts: 1091
Location: Hicksville, U.S.A., Earth, Rotating Sol in the Milky Way Galaxy, the northern quadrant of space...
Anytime...

However, if I put one of my poems on here, you may not survive...

It is recognized as the fourth worst in the universe, after all...

I recited it into the winds one day, and BAM!!! Hurricane Katerina...

_________________
I stayed in New Orleans for Hurricane Katrina, and all I got was this lousy T-shirt, a new Cadillac, and a plasma screen T.V....


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Sat Jan 28, 2006 10:08 am 
Tightwad
User avatar

Joined: Thu Jun 30, 2005 1:00 am
Posts: 892
Location: Under your bed with a really, really big knife
lacks a certain iambic pentameter.

_________________
Idaho State Motto: We're more than just potatoes...Ok, but the potatoes sure are good!


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Sat Jan 28, 2006 8:10 pm 
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon
Lord Advocate Noble Dragon

Joined: Sun Nov 27, 2005 1:27 am
Posts: 1091
Location: Hicksville, U.S.A., Earth, Rotating Sol in the Milky Way Galaxy, the northern quadrant of space...
Poems don't have to have an iambic petameter for them to be good...

But then, what do I know about poetry???

_________________
I stayed in New Orleans for Hurricane Katrina, and all I got was this lousy T-shirt, a new Cadillac, and a plasma screen T.V....


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
 Post subject:
PostPosted: Tue Jan 31, 2006 9:11 pm 
Silver sorceress
User avatar

Joined: Thu Dec 08, 2005 6:07 pm
Posts: 1501
Location: on the back of a black dragon laughing as the world dies below me
yeah really



...there r some good poems that dont have a.....iambic penta-wuts-ya-ma-call-it. so dont be so brash

_________________
If you were to juggle a lion, and a house cat, the end result would look something like a tattered chunk of red fabric. The cat would scratch anything within reach, and the lion would just eat you. The lesson to learn? Make sure you eat your spinach.


Top
 Offline Profile  
Reply with quote  
Display posts from previous:  Sort by  
Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 8 posts ] 

All times are UTC - 5 hours [ DST ]


Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests


You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot post attachments in this forum

Jump to: