This isn't all that great, but it's the first poem I've done in a while, and its fairly decent so I figured I'd share^^

Mask
I put on a mask,
And dance just for you.
Like a fool, prance ‘round,
Your laughter my cue.

I’m your jester, it seems-
Nothing more, nothing less.
A most pitiful clown,
In a floral print dress.

You muse and you mock me.
You shame and you spite.
-BUT-
You have no idea,
This all ends TONIGHT.

I shall have my last show,
Watch my last curtain fall.
And now ‘til forever,
Will not answer your call.

I’m tired of trying,
To be something I’m not.
I’m tired of hiding,
Behind this mask. Trapped. Caught.

So go ahead now,
And be entertained.
Laugh when I fall.
Grin at my pain.

Cause as of tonight,
My mask disappears.
No more jester am I,
To put up with your sneers.

It’s as Shakespeare once said,
“To thine own self, be true,â€￾
So get ready to see,
My true face break through.

~*Ciarda*~

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"And these children that you spit upon
As they try to change their worlds
Are immune to your consultation
They're quite aware of what they're going through"
--- David Bowie

very good poem. I like the imagery it brings up.

One things I will say though...the use of and in this bit

You muse and you mock me.
You shame and you spite.

kinda breaks up the ryhthm and I found myself stop flowing and re-reading it...if that's what you want for impact of those words then great. but maybe comma's will do the job just as well as and.
just my two yens worth (which believe me aint much at all)

That's about 2/40ths of a dollar. I think thoae lines flow alright, the and needs to be there or the eter will change.

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"Thunder is good, thunder is impressive, but it's lightning that does the work." ~Samuel Clemens

Mah Griffon is © Todd Lockwood.

Thanks much for the compliments and the comments to the both of you! Everything that ya'll say I take into account in my writing and try to put towards improving myself, so thanks for being constructive, etc. ^_^

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"And these children that you spit upon
As they try to change their worlds
Are immune to your consultation
They're quite aware of what they're going through"
--- David Bowie

Wow. I must have been tired when I wrote that. ...thoSe lines flow alright...or the Meter will change.

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"Thunder is good, thunder is impressive, but it's lightning that does the work." ~Samuel Clemens

Mah Griffon is © Todd Lockwood.